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Re: Mycelica Fic: Love Among the Flowers

2002-05-12T01:00:35+00:00

Sure! As I said, I am definitely open to constructive criticism, as long as it's not mean! I'm just not going to respond to any comments that are rude.

Yeah! haha.

Well the first thing I noticed is that you say that Yukino (I assume she's meant to be a Calyptra? Unless your EotS is allowing you to homebrew something) is doing a lot of blushing and flushing in their petals. So far as I know, the Calyptra don't have blood. (unless they've released a new splat book nobody told me about!! ) Feels a little weird for them to be blushing, you know?

Also, there's a couple references to "minutes," "hours," and "weeks" here which don't really match with the established system of timekeeping in Mycelica. Check out Page 97 of the rulebook for the conversion tables - don't really want to waste digital ink on reproducing them here lol.

The stars are changing quickly nowadays.

Do you have a page number reference for this?

Statistics: Posted by mothers_1st_son — Sun May 12, 2002 1:00 am

Re: Mycelica Fic: Love Among the Flowers

2002-04-21T12:58:05+00:00

Wow. Yukino, just wanted to say, I loved it! Welcome to the forum.

I did notice just a few things where maybe you could benefit from an expert's eye. Let me know if you're interested and I'd be glad to lend my aid.

Sure! As I said, I am definitely open to constructive criticism, as long as it's not mean! I'm just not going to respond to any comments that are rude.

Statistics: Posted by yukinohana — Sun Apr 21, 2002 12:58 pm

Re: Mycelica Fic: Love Among the Flowers

2002-04-17T05:51:02+00:00

Wow. Yukino, just wanted to say, I loved it! Welcome to the forum.

I did notice just a few things where maybe you could benefit from an expert's eye. Let me know if you're interested and I'd be glad to lend my aid.

Statistics: Posted by mothers_1st_son — Wed Apr 17, 2002 5:51 am

Re: Mycelica Fic: Love Among the Flowers

2002-03-30T15:37:36+00:00

if my chara SH4D0W_WR41TH was dere it wud go smth like dis

he walks out of da shadowz with his 4 lazer katanas ready and goes wooooow dats gayyyy
and cuts u 2 in half and den says but also hot and den leaves on his cyber bike

Statistics: Posted by .//Um8rA_K0r3 — Sat Mar 30, 2002 3:37 pm

Re: Mycelica Fic: Love Among the Flowers

2002-03-15T22:53:15+00:00

Beautiful. Definitely going to show this to my gf, she loves fanfic.

Aw, thank you! Maybe this could be the thing that helps her get into the system - I just replied to your other post ^_^; It'd be cool to start a community of fic writers.

Statistics: Posted by yukinohana — Fri Mar 15, 2002 10:53 pm

Re: Mycelica Fic: Love Among the Flowers

2002-02-21T02:49:13+00:00

Beautiful. Definitely going to show this to my gf, she loves fanfic.

Statistics: Posted by koterie-kid — Thu Feb 21, 2002 2:49 am

Mycelica Fic: Love Among the Flowers

2002-01-27T16:30:10+00:00

Hi everyone. I discovered this system recently and while I don't have anyone to actually play a game with, I absolutely love the lore and the setting. I've been designing some characters and I fell in love with these two in particular. I don't know if anyone here is into roleplaying, but I thought that some of you might enjoy reading a short fic that I wrote between two of my characters. Feedback welcome, but please be gentle! I only started writing recently and this is just a small scene. I'm hoping to expand it into a longer fic someday.

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Yukino stretched under the light of The Sun, petals lifted into the sky and roots burying themselves into the grass. Closing her eyes, she hummed a tune that she'd carried with her from childhood, one that when given words was meant to celebrate The Sun's blessings. She felt her sense of self drifting, carried away on the breeze as she became less herself and more one with the world around her. Each shift of the breeze brought with it new sounds and smells, quiet and sweet. ...Too sweet.

She blinked open her eyes, self rushing back to her. "Meadow," she breathed, knowing before she turned.

A quiet churring laugh behind her. "I was willing to wait, you know."

"No you weren't," Yukino giggled in return, pale petals flushing a little as she turned to face her companion. Meadow's periwinkle wings fluttered as she floated toward Yukino. Reaching for the Calyptra, she traced a blushing petal with her slender, dark fingers. "You don't believe me? For you, I would wait for at least twenty minutes. Perhaps even an hour."

Yukino blushed further, her own emerald hand raising to her face to wrap around Meadow's. "And just what are we supposed to get done in twenty minutes?" she teased as she intertwined their fingers.

"Nothing," Meadow said nonchalantly, the wings on her face fluttering in some pattern that Yukino hadn't learned yet, serving chiefly to hide her smile. "That's just a baseline. It's up to you to convince me that it's worth it to stay longer."

In tandem, the two moved to sit together on the grass, Meadow nestling herself among Yukinos petals. The Calyptra tugged her hand away to run her fingertips along one of Meadow's wings. They sat there quietly together, enjoying each other's presence under The Sun, until Yukino broke the silence. "Do you ever think about it?' she asked softly. "Staying for more than a week at a time?" She tried to keep her voice light, but the yearning crept in at the edges.

Meadow's fluttering wings stilled, her sigh warming Yukino's cheek. "Yuki..." she said wearily, and the tone made the Calyptra's heart sink a little. "We've talked about this before. It just doesn't happen. Can you remember the last time you knew a Lyelli who lingered in one place?"

Yukino angled her face slightly to catch Meadow's eye. "Who cares if it's not done if you want to do it, though?" she asked. "People change all the time. The stars are changing quickly nowadays. People are starting to do whatever they want, and-"

"Who says that I want to stay?" Meadow interrupted sharply, and Yukino stopped abruptly. Silence fell between them again, but this time even The Sun couldn't warm the chill that fell between them.

"...Do you?" Yukino whispered eventually. It was the question that had been forbidden between them, that she never dared to ask, that Meadow certainly wouldn't bring up. But something about her time under The Sun today had made her not brave, but bold. Her heart fully unfurled, she sank her roots into the grass and waited.

It was a long wait, long enough that she wondered if Meadow would simply leave. But eventually she felt the press of the Lyelli's wings against her cheek, a fluttering kiss. "I'll think about it," her winged lover said quietly. "I will, Yuki. But it wouldn't be an easy path for either of us, if I did."

Even with warnings attached, this ghost of a promise was enough to thaw some of the chill, to bring warmth back to Yukino's petals. "Thank you," she whispered, turning toward Meadow, her petals shielding them from any prying passersby. It wouldn't be enough forever. But it was enough for now.

Statistics: Posted by yukinohana — Sun Jan 27, 2002 4:30 pm